Check out Lynnette of Chatterbox Chitchat's critique of an excerpt of mine!

VERY useful resource...I highly recommend submitting your own work!

Note - this IS part of the excerpt I submitted for the Rumored Romantics Contest, but I'd edited that after I sent this - still, some of the issues she point out are still there.  As I work on polishing my writing, I'll be posting resources for things such as avoiding Purple Prose and Showing vs Telling.

Check out her critique here!